Monday, December 17, 2007

A Salmon Tale (A Story Written By Me)

The Salmon cycle Finding Nemo Style





On a windy day in Springtucky, Washington, there was a group of four friends, Jason, Nelson, Angela but we call her Angie, and Koryn. In just a little bit I will tell you a little about each of the characters then they will embark on there journey. They are all Chinook salmon and were all great friends from birth. Jason is in love with Angie but can't tell her, Nelson is the stud muffin/ Angies' Ex, Angie is in love with Nelson but me does not know that he likes Koryn. That leaves me with Koryn. She is kind of dumb and at times could remind you of some one who might not be all there.

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As the days go by it closer and closer to the time of going out into the ocean. All at once panic and fear sweeps over their faces. None of the little fishes have any idea when they have to leave their redd on their search for stardom. (Something I should have mentioned in the beginning is that they are in a pop group called the chinookies.) Their favorite song they sing is titled Make A Wish. It goes something like this. One day when I grow up I wanna be big and tall like my daddy Brock. That's my wish and if I think about all the time one day soon I will reach the top. Make a wish ooooo make a wish ohhh yaaaaaa. “That song will be famous one day” So they say and think.
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The day has come. They have reached their fry stage and are on their way down stream. For those who are not familiar with the life cycle of a salmon, the fry stage is the stage in which they slowly start migrating down stream. “why do we have these weird black stripes on our backs?” Said Koryn. “Well.” said Nelson. “It shows that we are matured enough to start our smolt stage.” “Oh.” She says. “What's the smolt stage?” “Are you that stupid?” Said Angie. Well the smolt stage for those of our readers who do not know it the stage in which they go into the estuaries. “What” SHUT UP KORYN. An estuary is where the salt water of the ocean meets the fresh water of the river. The reason salmon go through this stage is so that they can get used to the salt water so they can survive in the ocean. “Hey gang.” Nelson shouts. “Lets go into that ocean and get that record deal.” All at once they all shouts YES LETS GO.
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One year into their seven year journey has approached. “Wow, We have made it this far, gang., what a trip! Only six years to go.” I think we can make it and get that record deal and beat our competitors. The barracuda brothers. This is not going to be easy for our fish friends, as they will encounter many, many difficulties throughout this journey.
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As our friends swim further and further out to sea the more scared they become. All of a sudden they run into a dolphin. Now all our friends where scared because they did not know it was a dolphin,but, they thought it was a shark. This made Rikki sad (Rikki is the dolphin). As our fish friends swam away Rikki went after them. Rikki has no friends and was hoping that our fish friends would be hers too. “wait up” she shouts. But they go faster and faster. Then they finally lost her and sat down to have a rest. Little did they know that Rikki was right behind them. She caught up to them, but they were asleep.
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Fast asleep they were and when they woke up they woke up to a surprise. Rikki was resting right in front of them just staring straight at them. When they awoke Angie almost had a heart attack. What are you doing here they all shout. “I'm not mean”! She says. But your a umm a umm ummm “gulp” shark. “NO I'M NOT I AM A DOLPHIN”. Sorry so so sorry we thought you where a yea. It's okay i get it a lot. So our friends accepted Rikki and asked her if she wants to hang out with them on there journey. “Sure”. So it was official she was a groupie.
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As our friends went on they told Rikki of there reason for this ocean journey. Rikki was so excited to a part of a group for the first tie that she is willing to do anything to keep them safe. “through think and thin I will be here for you and keep you safe.” Thank you they say to her. Swimming and swimming deeper and deeper they go. They all wish they would find Long Beach California NOW!!! Once in California they have to find Juna the Tuna. Juna is the owner and founder of The Deep Blue recording Studio. (If you haven't guessed it yet Juna can help them get there record deal).
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The day has come and they reach Long beach california. When they went into the story they tried to find Juna but he was no where to be found. They looked hi and low low and hi and could not find it. “maybe were in the wrong place” they all start to think. So Rikki being the only one who can read goes out side to see what the sign says. She comes back with a sad look on her face. “The sign says Santa Monica's Deep Blue recording studio”. So they all go outside and continue their journey. They finally without hesitation find the correct recording studio. Unlucky for them Juna wont be there for two whole days. They are all so sad because they only have four more year before they have to go back and spawn.
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Our friends decided to go and play near the shore but that was a huge mistake on there part. “Look Look there is a dolphin over there”. Says a fisherman on a boat. Without hesitating they swim faster and faster to get away. The fishermen catch Rikki and they star to run drive off slowly. Try biting the net they all shout. Out of nowhere another fish comes up and bites a huge whole in the net for Rikki to get out. “Thank you so much” they all shout. “Your welcome” all at the same they ask this fish what its name is. Juna he says. Wow the Juna the one who owns the record company? Yes wow we have been searching and searching to find you and now your here. “come to my office tomorrow and we will meet”. Thank you so much we will be there.
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Needless to say they went they talk and they got the record deal. Thank you so much we will do you great wonders they all say. I know you will. So for three and a half years they are doing great then they remember they have to go spawn. Oh no fine lets go. “Can I come” Rikki asks. Sure you can come some f the time but not the whole because you will not be used to fresh water. Okay. I just hope I make it all the way to where I am going with you. Whay? I don't feel good. Oh i am so sorry. It's okay. So our friends start their journey back to Springtucky. When they reach Rockaway Beach oregon they decide to rest.
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The next day they get up and only have one month left to get there. We have to hurry they shout. Well I think Rikki should stop here and not go any further, okay they decide. They go to get her up and she will not wake up. What's wrong they are thinking. They go find a doctor and to their sad surprise Rikki went in her sleep. “Okay we must not stay lets go” Koryn decides. So they left and returned home two weeks later. They lay there eggs and have them fertilized and in the end everyone ended up with who they wanted. Nelson even fertilized Koryns' eggs too. Happy as clams they are sitting around a fire then all of a sudden they all fall over and die. I just want to add that is was what was meant for them. They went out fought for what they wanted succeeded it and so can you.

1 comment:

Fresh Start @ The IKE Box said...

For grading purposes: This is a great improvement from your rough draft! Nice job! I like your integration of the life cycle and you use good encounters along the way. My only suggestion would be to bring out more with your characters. It was just the "Group of Friends" most of the way. 47/50